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• Arrival

  Primary Genre: Realistic fiction Word Count: 1,237 Beta Readers: 0

  Hi fellow writer! This is the first chapter of my literary thriller. It introduces Ian Page, my hero, arriving in Hong Kong after leaving family in Chicago on Christmas day. I'd love any feedback. No need to pull punches.

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• Secrets and the Sand

  Primary Genre: Science fiction Word Count: 2,123 Beta Readers: 0

  Give me any kind of details that you find.

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• Lingering Shadows

  Primary Genre: Suspense/thriller Word Count: 40,000 Beta Readers: 0

  Lucia Pierce killed her mother, or so she thought. She is racked with guilt and nightmares, and marked with scars that remind her of her sin every day.

  Thirteen years later, in the wake of her father's death, Lucia takes ownership of the family home they left behind years ago...

  Lucia Pierce killed her mother, or so she thought. She is racked with guilt and nightmares, and marked with scars that remind her of her sin every day.

  Thirteen years later, in the wake of her father's death, Lucia takes ownership of the family home they left behind years ago – traveling hundreds of miles to start a new life in an old house. She finds the property in a disastrous state, a result of both neglect over time and active destruction by any number of people.

  With a massive job ahead of her, Lucia gets to work right away. Cleaning, sorting, and moving occupy nearly all of her time. As she sifts through what remains of her childhood, Lucia makes a discovery that hints at her mother’s leading dangerous double life and the long-held deadly grudge that remains over her own head.

  Isaac Young finds himself caught in the crossfire as he attempts to be a good neighbor, helping Lucia to both rehabilitate the property and learn to let go of a past created for her by the adults in her life. Will Lucia be able to move forward and forgive herself, or will she double-down on loathing herself in light of what she’s learned about the most important person in her life?

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  I am looking for mainly developmental and story feedback. What makes sense/doesn't make sense about the story, are there areas where it feels lacking or over done, etc. That said, I am open to any and all feedback as I continue to move forward with this project in hopes of finishing it up soon!

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• Withac collection 1 (2023)

  Primary Genre: Suspense/thriller Word Count: 6,168 Beta Readers: 1

  Here's five short horror stories that I wrote over last year without a general theme between them. Would appreciate feedback, I'm always looking to improve my writings. Thanks in advance, hope you enjoy, Al.
  

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• Tangled Hearts

  Primary Genre: Romance Word Count: 52,643 Beta Readers: 0

  I am looking for feedback on transition as the story progressions and the story overall.

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• The Seed of Troubles

  Primary Genre: Fantasy Word Count: 8,600 Beta Readers: 0

  I`m fairly new to writing and would like feedback on the story/characters (it's an early draft so it will need grammatical & Typo fixes which are not important now).

  The story takes place in a world quite different than ours. In a realm largely isolated from the larger world. However,...

  I`m fairly new to writing and would like feedback on the story/characters (it's an early draft so it will need grammatical & Typo fixes which are not important now).

  The story takes place in a world quite different than ours. In a realm largely isolated from the larger world. However, troubles begin when foreign peoples begin entering this realm and throw it into chaos. The story follows a boy displaced due to conflict, an exiled general, a mysteries swordmen and his strange companions.
  The story is meant to be very fantastical, involving gods, demons, hero's, fantasy creatures, and fair bit of tragedy.
  *This is only a few early chapters.

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• zendari

  Primary Genre: Science fiction Word Count: 60,000 Beta Readers: 0

  This is a story about a planet run by the women that abduct men from earth. The men think that this is the best place ever, but they have no idea what these women are capable of.
  1. I would feedback on the storyline.
  2. I would like feedback on...

  This is a story about a planet run by the women that abduct men from earth. The men think that this is the best place ever, but they have no idea what these women are capable of.
  1. I would feedback on the storyline.
  2. I would like feedback on the characters.
  3. I would like feedback on the scenery

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• The Mixed Blood Of My Brothers: A Farlands Tale

  Primary Genre: Fantasy Word Count: 5,097 Beta Readers: 0

  This is a writing project I started last year. I'm a fairly new writer and I understand this piece has a lot of things that need to be addressed. From the character voice too the prose, I can objectively say this piece is..okay, but not good. All I really want...

  This is a writing project I started last year. I'm a fairly new writer and I understand this piece has a lot of things that need to be addressed. From the character voice too the prose, I can objectively say this piece is..okay, but not good. All I really want to know from you is how I can tell this story from Elliot's perspective? Thank you for seeing this and happy reading.

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• The Trailing Spouses Network - Ch 7 to the end

  Primary Genre: Romance Word Count: 68,800 Beta Readers: 3

  This is the finale of The Trailing Spouses Network from chapter 7 to the end of chapter 11. This story follows four American families that move to South Africa. The women become friends and form a support network. The men are charming but reckless. The women take bold chances to...

  This is the finale of The Trailing Spouses Network from chapter 7 to the end of chapter 11. This story follows four American families that move to South Africa. The women become friends and form a support network. The men are charming but reckless. The women take bold chances to meet their destiny.
  This story is about four American families moving to South Africa. The focus is on the four women, the trailing spouses.
  1. Were you confused by the shift in time?
  2. An omniscient narrator tells this story. Were you confused by whose head you were in?
  3. Were there slow spots that made you want to stop reading? Where?
  4. This draft picks up from Chapter 7 to the end. Is the ending credible?

  Thank you for reading my story.

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• Seeing yourself as Joseph?

  Primary Genre: Self improvement (Non-fiction) Word Count: 15,848 Beta Readers: 0

  This is an existential christian book based on the life of Joseph in the Jedeo christian bible. It's goal is to encourage others who maybe facing diverse challenges and need a word of assurance. This book isn't writen to convert or necessarily strengthen someone's faith but to help others...

  This is an existential christian book based on the life of Joseph in the Jedeo christian bible. It's goal is to encourage others who maybe facing diverse challenges and need a word of assurance. This book isn't writen to convert or necessarily strengthen someone's faith but to help others deal with the challenges of life. There isn't any sermonizing or the use of cliche words of affirmation but the use of Jungian psychology and philosophy, with Friedrich Nietzsche being a strong influence.
  This book isn't completely as yet but will be one chapter at a time. I haven't edited it as as I am waiting to complete the first draft but I am putting it out there to see if it makes sense to others. This is my first book.

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