Half Of Me

Primary Genre: Fantasy

Word Count: 29,333

Description and Details:

A portal/Adventure fantasy with family and romantic subplots. I would like feed back on worldbuilding: are there any important details that have been missed out, not explained or don't make sense? Same for characters and plot. Characters: are they individual but consistent? do they have clear agency and goals? hows their voice in dialogue, is it flat or the same as other character voices? how could this be improved on? The hate to love romance: I know myself which bits I think need to be rewritten, but I'd like some feedback and opinions on how to make Lagan and Nausicaa have a meaningful meet-hate, and a full and satisfying hate to love romance that hits all necessary points and doesn't skip the mid point friendship. Also how can I advance the romance while the characters are navigating the main plot? Research: are there any aspects I've included that obviously need research? I'll give you the first one: archery and weapon lingo.