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Get Beta Readers for Your WorkThis is an erotic dark romance following a sex worker who gets coerced into spying on her criminal clientele by a crooked cop.
This... is... a fanfic. A Fanfic of a video game called Sonic Forces. Yes... Sonic the Hedgehog. A story I was so disappointed with. So I re-wrote it. In a darker dramatic way. It starts off like the game... but after what happens to Sonic... It's all out of my...
This... is... a fanfic. A Fanfic of a video game called Sonic Forces. Yes... Sonic the Hedgehog. A story I was so disappointed with. So I re-wrote it. In a darker dramatic way. It starts off like the game... but after what happens to Sonic... It's all out of my head.
I'm not the best writer in the world. I just want to know if it's any good or at least enjoyable. Like I said before, This is the First set of Chapters out of Four. The grand total word count is 164k words. Its all done and complete. I've been at this for about 2yrs trying to get it right.
So thanks for reading/listening.
WARNING!!! This is written with TEENS to ADULTS IN MIND. Language is UNCENSORED.
In Context: Tails in this story is 16 yrs old. With that in mind. Sonic and everyone else are in their mid-twenties close to thirties. Reason for that is due to the tone of the story is Suspenseful Drama, Violence and Language. But don't worry they don't swear. Worst thing to come out of them is Damn. But... the OC's? Get ready to see that F-word quite a bit.
The Story is a Drama first, Suspense and Action. In that order.
Another thing is that there aren't any Wisps elemental weapons of power. The weaponry is typical weapons used in military. Knives, Pistols, Assault Rifles, Sniper Rifles, and Shotguns.
Same goes for Super Powers. Sonic and Friends are still intact. Sonic super-fast, Tails can fly... etc, etc, but the OC's don't. They are just average nobodies trying to make a difference.
The Sonic Cast is: Main: Sonic, Tails, Knuckles and Amy. Side Characters are: Silver, Vector, Espio and Charmie.
The OC Cast is: Main: Chris(Hedgehog) Zeke(Wolf) Trish(Dalmatian) Barnett(Rabbit) Side Characters: Zander(Dalmatian) POS(Labrador) Eddie&Edward(Cat) and Lance(Kodiak Bear)
If pacing is too slow or long. If dialogue is good.
I'd like some criticism about my story structure. This is my second time writing my first chapter to try to make it flow better, make it more natural and comprehensive, so feedback about that would be amazing.
Humans and demi-humans have always been at odds due to their different physical appearances and culture, but tensions rise as a powerful human kingdom seeks to wipe the demi population from existence. No one dares oppose them, fearing war, but some agree something must be done to stop the madness....
Humans and demi-humans have always been at odds due to their different physical appearances and culture, but tensions rise as a powerful human kingdom seeks to wipe the demi population from existence. No one dares oppose them, fearing war, but some agree something must be done to stop the madness. Friends are made, new enemies rise from the shadows, and old prophecies are brought to light. Will humanity unite with the demi-humans to put an end to the senseless violence, or will they succumb to the harbingers of the apocalypse?
Denver Police Detective Travis Hudson gets his most intriguing case while text messages and instructions are being sent to him. Time starts running out while his best friend and partner Abigail Hennessy becomes kidnapped he realizes his true feeling for her.
Looking for any feedback you can give, this will be my first novel.
Do you like the book and does it make sense
Completely unedited, Full first chapter and part of the second chapter. Any advice and criticism is welcome, getting back into writing for the first time in years
This is my first novel. Would like general advice and guidance. Wondering if there is a future for me as a writer.
Synopsis:
Everything is planned for; Peter will become a computer programmer and live out his life coding, just like the state says. But when the time for job...
This is my first novel. Would like general advice and guidance. Wondering if there is a future for me as a writer.
Synopsis:
Everything is planned for; Peter will become a computer programmer and live out his life coding, just like the state says. But when the time for job selection comes, he secretly changes his occupation to work in the State Security Services. He gets the life he always wanted; a meaningful career serving the state against their enemy known as Astraea.
Unfortunately, the innocent, naive, and good-natured Peter finds out government work is filled with horrific duties. Saddened and regretful about his findings he eventually gets another chance at happiness when, for an unknown reason, he is invited into Qayin, where the rich and powerful live.
After moving into Qayin he finds out the horrible price to pay to live there and has a struggle within himself to do the right thing. A plan to expose the society leads to one question: is it worth dying for? But Peter finds out there are worse things than death.